Proof

[Alan Sondheim]

Proof

'sneer' seems to have a space between s and n first line middle - the
double arrow <--> doesn't read that way because of the type - can you use
a symbol here? same on type line from bottom, every-thing change to
everything can you change the italics of "in this sentence" to "_in this
sentence_"? The underline would go better with the rest of the typography
in this piece. line of type, please change "west" to "West" at the bottom
of : "Am Ursprung gibts kein Plagiat" (Karl Kraus) - please if possible
put this on the Dedication as well. maybe put "TERMI NAL" on a line by
itself: TERMINAL from bottom - need parenthetical closure after "spatial"
middle - you might want to use arrow symbols here as well very top of -
since this is untitled, it seems a continuation of - maybe capitalize
HONEY:> NOTHING WORKS IN THIS SPACE, - just that far, as indicative of a
new piece. not sure but there seems a slight opening between lines and
third line - please take out "(changed the name)" - it seems self-evident
- rd paragraph, from third sentence - can we change to "Wild theory is
pierced, penetrated. The piercings" - then include the rest of the
paragraph. In other words, take out the ref. to grrrl theory. is a sonnet
of lines plus . But here the justifying makes a bit of a mess of it.
Perhaps you can run it sideways - some way to preserve the original lines?
Smaller type? down about a third - change "oopback" to "loopback" - please
note about / of the way down, where "Member name" and the next two lines
are - they're misaligned, check the ms? Same near bottom where the
____media____ and the next line is - they should be on the same line -
please check the syntax here? for example second line, you have _=-; it
should be either _=_ or -=-. The whole needs checking. there's odd
alignments of "Alan sings o/~" - I wonder if this can be rejustified? If
not, it's ok - you might check the alignment of this with the original -
it's a bit off. Will do, however -